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c. One may eventually win what he has set his mind to, only to find that he has lost quite a lot. Perhaps what he loses is even better than what he gains.
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汉语原句为一句，译a和b均照样译成一句。而译c偏译成了两句，又是由简入繁！诚然，莎士比亚曾云，Brevity is the soul of wit（言以简洁为贵），但却不能因简而挫其文气。文气盎然，文意才能饱满充盈。无独有偶，译a和译b均以定语从句来译原句中的“而失去的原来比得到的可能还要好”！虽然达意，但是文意就在一笔带过的表达之中显得有点苍白乏力，因为，原句三句并列，然末句毕竟是全句之“眼”。因此，译c将末句独立译成一句，文意显豁，立意清醇。
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另外，译c运用了成语only to，这个繁，真是繁得其所！因为，only to的含义是：不料竟会，没想到会。only to的添用，令译文有了文采，就表达的感情色彩而言，确胜过了汉语原句，原句“失去了却很多很多”显得平淡，缺乏感情的涟漪。
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物化了的生命硬如岩石，而那些看似无价值的却永葆着神韵和空灵。
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a. The materialized life is as hard as a rock, which the seemingly worthless life always keeps its freshness and flexibility.
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b. Materialized life is as rigid as a rock, while those apparently valueless things keep spirit and life.
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c. Life, when petrified by material desires, is as callous as stone, while those seemingly worthless things always remain fresh and full of spirit.
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对汉译英译文的过简现象，可以有两种分析：1）因译文失之过简而无法将汉语原句的意思充分清晰地加以传递，致使译文读者不知所云，甚至导致误解；2）英译不符合英语的表达习惯，英语味欠缺，艰涩生硬，缺乏美感。
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解决英语译文过简问题，首先要防止出现第一种情况。以上“物化了的生命硬如岩石”的英译就是一例，值得一议。译a和译b几乎如出一辙，系直译，而native speakers却难以理解其中的比喻：as hard as a rock / as rigid as a rock；读之，如坐云雾。因为，英语是一种逻辑性很强的语言，每个单词、每个词组都必须有个明确的交代，不容含糊。
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汉语表达在很大程度上依靠词组的整体感应，在朦胧中传达信息，在疏放中透出美感。对于“物化了的生命硬如岩石”这样的表达，读者能迅速准确把握其弦外之音：当一个人的物质追求膨胀到一定程度，此君必有一副铁石心肠，处世待人将异常冷漠。
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从这个意义上分析，译c虽然在措辞上繁了些，但是，却准确地传递了汉语原句所含的赅意。尤其是其中的两个词（petrify, callous）用得准确传神！
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American Heritage Dictionary对这两个词的解释如下：
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petrify: to cause to become stiff or stonelike; deaden.
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callous: emotionally hardened; unfeeling: a callous indifference to the suffering of others.
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人生旅途上，有人背负着名利急急奔走，有人回归自然，飘逸而行。
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a. On the road of life, some run hurriedly with the burden of fame and interests on their shoulder, while others come back to the nature and lead an easy and free life.
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b. On the road of life, some one is burdened with fame and interests and goes in a hurry; some one returns to the nature and walks elegantly.
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c. In their journey through life, some people hurry on with a heavy heart in pursuit of fame and gain, while others go with an easy grace, enjoying themselves in harmony with nature.
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行文至此，是否可以得出这样的结论：所谓英译过简者，十之八九为做表层转换的直译。“有人背负着名利急急奔走”的英译便是一例。译a和译b几乎如出一辙：some run hurriedly with the burden of fame and interests on their shoulder / some one is burdened with fame and interests and goes in a hurry。
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何谓“背负着名利”？背负在追名逐利的思想包袱也！以汉语为母语者，并不难从“背负着名利”中演绎出如此理解，然而，要一个native speaker从with the burden of fame and interests on their shoulder / burdened with fame and interests 演绎出with a heavy heart in pursuit of fame and gain的理解就有点强人所难了。对with the burden of / burdened with略作语法分析，就能察觉在指“名利在身”者，这与汉语原句所蕴涵的信息距离很大。
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比较之下，译c确实繁了许多，但是，some people hurry on with a heavy heart in pursuit of fame and gain准确译出了“追名逐利之徒”的言外之意。
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同样，译a和译b对“回归自然”也做了简单的表层转换：come back to the nature / returns to the nature。这里的“回归自然”与“背负着名利急急奔走”存在着潜在的比照。尤其是“自然”二字，有多种解释，应谨慎揣摩。这里的“自然”并非指“自然界”（nature / the natural world），而是指“任其自然地发展，不刻意干预”（naturally / in the ordinary and natural course of events / in harmony with nature）。译c的理解是正确的，其英译（while others go with an easy grace, enjoying themselves in harmony with nature）搭准了原句的脉搏。
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总之，汉译英的由简入繁不仅仅是一个表达习惯的问题，而是折射了诸多深层次的问题，比如中西文化之异、中西思维之异以及汉语和英语各自具有的特色。若能从宏观上对这些问题有所把握，在汉译英的过程中，心中会更有底，下笔也会有神。
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