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【原译】At the age of 20, I only read paragraphs about love when reading novels. At the age of 30, my name was “no speaking love” in chatroom on the Internet.
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【改译】At the age of twenty, while reading a novel, I abandoned myself to the chapters exclusively devoted to romance. After thirty, I dubbed myself as “Talk No Love”. in the Internet chat-room.
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两译相比，最大的区别在于遣词。试比较my name was “no speaking love”，和I dubbed myself as “Talk No Love”。前译的name用得懒散苍白，极为模糊，而后译之dub，就非常明确，其含义是：授予…称号，把…称为。如：The region is dubbed the paradise on earth.（这地方被人称为人间天堂。）前面讲到模糊美，而不能偏废的是，译文的遣词，往往有一般和特定、抽象和具体、模糊和明确之别。两者相比，孰美孰陋，应视语境而定。
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二十岁的时候，一听到名人就激动不已，就欢呼雀跃，就奋不顾身往前冲。三十岁之后，一听到名人就若有所失，就心烦意乱，就怒火中烧，就……不知道什么滋味，特别是年轻的，漂亮的，女名人。
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【原译】When I was twenty, hearing the name of a famous person, I would be so excited that I could almost jump up with cheer and dashed ahead regardless of my safety. After thirty, I was indifferent, annoyed, flew into a temper and I had no feeling to hear the name of the famous man, particularly of those famous, young and pretty females who were young and pretty.
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【改译】At the age of twenty, upon hearing a celebrity, I would rush forward, hot-blooded, jumping for joy. After thirty, upon hearing the names of celebrities, I feel lost, vexed and burning with anger, especially the names of those famous females, who are young and pretty.
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汉语以神驭形，可视作意境语言，偏重暗示，欣赏含蓄，写意性很强。而英语则以形摄神，极重逻辑分析，欣赏写实。
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以汉语“湖光山色”为例，就比较虚幻，难以落实，尤以“光”字为甚，然写意之中，又具有极强的暗示力，能让读者触发联想，营设如画的意境。
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在英译“湖光山色”时，两种语言的差异就逼现在译者面前。其中的“光”，还有一个“色”字，英译时，必须落实，必须有一个明确的交代，否则，就译不出，就只能笼统译之，根本无法照顾到原文的意境或文采。
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我们得到的权威译文是：
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a. a landscape of lakes and mountains
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b. the natural beauty of lakes and mountains
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c. a beautiful scenery of lakes and mountains
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d. the beautiful scenery of the mountains and lakes
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两种语言的本质性区别告诉我们一条经验：汉语的一些属于意境性、写意性的表达，只能意译，而难以或不能直译。一定要直译，非出洋相不可。如有人硬性把“湖光山色”译成the light of the lakes and the color of the mountains。英语的native speakers读此译文问：What kind of light is it? Where does the light come from?
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回到原句，“一听到名人就激动不已，就欢呼雀跃，就奋不顾身往前冲”，其中的“激动不已”、“欢呼雀跃”、“奋不顾身往前冲”，就有一个从写实到写意的过度。特别是“奋不顾身”，纯属写意。如此写意，决不能照直译来，直译将酿成费解，甚至荒诞，就像“湖光山色”一样。
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然而，前译直译其为dashed ahead regardless of my safety。英语的native speakers读此译时，困惑油然而生：Was the famous man holding a handgun, ready to shoot at you?
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二十岁的时候，和某个人晚上一起去看了场电影，不经意中拉了一次手，结果幸福了整整一个夏天。三十岁之后，坐在香格里拉酒店的旋转餐厅陪客户吃自助餐，在缓缓的转动之中，莫名其妙地一阵空虚，突然间对一切感到索然无味……
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【原译】At the age of twenty, I went to see a film on a night with someone who casually took my hand in his palm, and this sweet happiness lingered for the whole summer. After I have turned thirty, I feel an aching void in the slow movement of the rotating restaurant, where I dine with my clients upon a buffet meal, in Shangri-La Hotel and all of a sudden I lost interest in everything.
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【改译】At the age of twenty, one evening, I went to see a film with a boy. In the darkness, an incidental touch of hands filled me with joy all that summer. I am thirty, sitting the rotating restaurant of Shangri-La Hotel, accompanying my clients having a buffet. In the slow rotating, an indescribable emptiness, all of a sudden, seizes me, and I find everything dull and dry.
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汉语以无主语句为美，而英语则以非人称主语句见长。试比较：
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不经意中拉了一次手，结果幸福了整整一个夏天。（主语系“我”，这个“我”字不必道出，读者听者皆能轻易感悟。）
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In the darkness, an incidental touch of hands filled me with joy all that summer.（行文何等酣畅自如，表意何其明快淋漓！只缘用了impersonal subject sentence!）
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莫名其妙地一阵空虚，突然间对一切感到索然无味……（同样也是省略了主语“我”的句式。）
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An indescribable emptiness, all of a sudden, seizes me.（同样是精彩纷呈、几读不厌的非人称主语句。）
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